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Offline SirTJ

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TJ Needs YOU!! Yep, I'm Talking to YOU!!
« on: March 17, 2010, 02:05:48 PM »
Okay, here's the deal. This writing group that I am has given us a task: write a novel.

Yep...a whole, complete, full NOVEL.

So, I've come up with two stories to write my novel about, but I kind of need my family's help on deciding which to go with. Which one do you like best? Do you like EITHER of them? Would you read a novel about them? What are some things you would do with the stories? (<-- obviously you don't have to answer all of these).

I know a lot of people don't like to read anything longer than a paragraph, so I don't expect everyone to offer input, but if I could get a couple of you, that'll be cool. Here are the two synopsis':


STORY 1:

Title:
"They Wear Masks"

In The world of Elgiem, everyone wears a mask - both figuratively and literally.

The masks allow them to be anyone or anything they desire to be. Every year, on October 31st, they take the masks off and pretend to be the person they were born to be - but no one recognizes each other. Not without the masks.

The distinctions in the masks give each person their personal identities. For years, there has been dissension between a sector of the population called the "lights" (those whose masks are shades of red, orange, and/or yellow) and the "darks" (those whose masks are shades of blue and/or purple). Both races fight to claim 'superiority' over the other, and these fights often manifest in forms of crime, violence, and hatred.

But there's one thing that unites them both: Physical Poetry.

Stadiums flood with people from both races, all eager to be entertained and enthralled by this marriage of poetry and elaborate presentation. For the last several years, however, the quality of Physical Poetry has declined. The words aren't as magical as they once wore, and the elaborate presentations meant to enhance those words have become dull at best.

But before this powerful form of art is completely lost, a young kid, simply known as "Jaspar", bursts unto the scene and sparks a revival of epic proportions. His awe-inspiring talent as a physical poet breathes life into the genre, making it more popular and beloved than ever before.

Against the well wishes of his loved ones, Jaspar is immediately swept up by an entertainment industry that seeks to profit from his magical abilities as a physical poet. His voice becomes influential in both the arenas of entertainment and politics. People, young and old, harken to his words and live by them. Big wig politicians invite him to dine with them. He's sitting on top of the world.

But while there, he witnesses things his eyes can't believe. Government secrets, lies, and conspiracies that, if kept enclosed, could destroy Elgiem. Politicians and elected officials with secret agendas. Entertainment executives using super-intelligent devices to deceive the population. It's scary - and he's now expected to be a part of it all.

This is the story of a dorky kid turned larger-than-life icon who fights to use his resounding voice in a desperate scrimmage against the very ones who gave him that voice. Lies, corruption, and conspiracies are running rapid in Elgiem through the mega worlds of Entertainment and Government, and his fight is against an industry that has the power to bring him down just as fast they brought him up. And if he doesn't keep quiet and go with the flow, that's exactly what they'll do.

Everyone in Elgiem wears a mask. Everyone.


STORY 2:


Title: "Peopled Earth"

As chief editor of the buzzing "Chronicles" magazine, Josiah Macklin could honestly say he had the best staff money could buy.

Yesterday, he fired them all.

Shaken by his fiancee's blatant infidelity, Josiah considers ending it all. His college years were spent fearful and alone. No friends, no girls; but when he found her, that hole inside of him was sealed. He finally had that intimacy he longed for. He felt complete.

But now, all of that was gone. He was back to being the loner.

Seemed like a perfect time to end it all. So he loaded the gun.

But the sound of television in the background kept picking at him. He went to turn it off…

"And I close this broadcast, I just want to leave you with this one thought…nothing is to be feared, only understood."

Josiah stopped. That statement echoed through his mind and heart. Nothing is to be feared, only understood.

So Josiah fires his seemingly perfect staff at "Chronicles" magazine and goes through a rigorous interview process in order to find a new team - a team filled with the right people. All different from each other. Each one containing a characteristic that is common to humanity.

His mission: to understand people. To understand why they do the things they do…why they make the decisions they make…why they act in certain ways. He wants to understand it all. Completely.

So, with his new team assembled, he goes to extraordinary lengths to throw at them problems and situations designed to make them react - and he sits back, observing and recording those reactions. He uses his magazine to persuade the general population - and he continues to observe and record. He's the scientist, and they are the lab rats. By the time it's all said and done, he'll understand people completely. He'll understand the hypocrite. He'll understand the fearful person. He'll understand the cheater. He'll understand the ambitious person. He'll understand why one succeeds at life and the other fails.

And in the process, he'll discover much about himself that he never knew.

This is the story of a hurting man who goes to extraordinary lengths to fully and finally understand and comprehend the source of his pain: People.

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Thanks yall. I'll give you a shout out in the "Thanks" section if it get's published.  ;D :D

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« Reply #1 on: March 17, 2010, 02:09:23 PM »
I'd go with the second one.  The first one is a bit out there.

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« Reply #2 on: March 17, 2010, 02:10:22 PM »
I like the second one too!

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« Reply #3 on: March 17, 2010, 02:11:56 PM »
Story 1 reminds me a little of a 'Twilight Zone' episode I once watched.  I would be interested in seeing how story 2 develops.

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« Reply #4 on: March 17, 2010, 02:28:13 PM »
I like them both, but I think I like Story One best.

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« Reply #5 on: March 17, 2010, 02:31:44 PM »
I LOVE LOVE LOVE story number 1! 

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« Reply #6 on: March 17, 2010, 02:36:06 PM »
Thank you all for the input! Keep it coming, please!!

Also, did anyone not catch the subtle rib in Story #1? The world of "Elgiem"...Elgiem...L-G-M.  ;D ;D

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« Reply #7 on: March 17, 2010, 02:40:55 PM »
I pick story #2. #1 is good, but like someone else said it sounds like something that's already out.
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« Reply #8 on: March 17, 2010, 02:41:33 PM »
Thank you all for the input! Keep it coming, please!!

Also, did anyone not catch the subtle rib in Story #1? The world of "Elgiem"...Elgiem...L-G-M.  ;D ;D

Thanks for spoiling that, chief.  :-\ Story #2, btw.
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« Reply #9 on: March 17, 2010, 02:49:28 PM »
I pick story #2. #1 is good, but like someone else said it sounds like something that's already out.

That was one of my concerns with#1, too. I wanted to see if others would think the same. I guess, in a way, it would present a challenge to throw some uniqueness to a 'typical' type of story. It sounds kind of like a Dan Brown plot with all the conspiracies and what not.

Thanks again, folks!! Keep 'em coming. I'm taking it allll in.  ;)

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« Reply #10 on: March 17, 2010, 03:41:39 PM »
I read them both, I read them both!!!!!!!! Yayyyyy me!!!!!!!

That said, definitely #2. Number one sounds a bit sci-fi, and I'm not that chick.

Thank you all for the input! Keep it coming, please!!

Also, did anyone not catch the subtle rib in Story #1? The world of "Elgiem"...Elgiem...L-G-M.  ;D ;D
Thanks for spoiling that, chief.  :-\ Story #2, btw.

I think he's used that before. Or someone did. It's definitely familiar. I'd bet dollars to donuts that if we did a search, we'd find a post with that word somewhere.

Cute though, Teej.  :D
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« Reply #11 on: March 17, 2010, 03:43:35 PM »
I read them both, I read them both!!!!!!!! Yayyyyy me!!!!!!!

That said, definitely #2. Number one sounds a bit sci-fi, and I'm not that chick.

I think he's used that before. Or someone did. It's definitely familiar. I'd bet dollars to donuts that if we did a search, we'd find a post with that word somewhere.

Cute though, Teej.  :D
Yeah, he's used it before.

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« Reply #12 on: March 17, 2010, 03:45:06 PM »
Yeah, he's used it before.


Yep. Actually, according to the archives, it's been used by: The Veteran; Fenbox and The Wolfman...and Nessa, apparently.  :D


http://www.learngospelmusic.com/forums/index.php/topic,59846.msg605100.html#msg605100

The above is Wolfie (pg. 7)
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« Reply #13 on: March 17, 2010, 03:45:39 PM »
I read them both, I read them both!!!!!!!! Yayyyyy me!!!!!!!

That said, definitely #2. Number one sounds a bit sci-fi, and I'm not that chick.

I think he's used that before. Or someone did. It's definitely familiar. I'd bet dollars to donuts that if we did a search, we'd find a post with that word somewhere.

Cute though, Teej.  :D

Yeah, I did. Remember when I was gonna write that story about "Elgiem" being under attack by King Brutha the 28th.  ;D :D

It was a chat room discussion. Yep...chat room. 'Sho would be nice if we had those consistently again.  :( :'(

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« Reply #14 on: March 17, 2010, 03:46:39 PM »
Didn't you know that HammerRock's a prophet?  ::) ;D

Yeah, it says so in his epistle to the Elgiems.

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« Reply #15 on: March 17, 2010, 04:17:38 PM »
Yes, Hammerrock was actually the first.  He wrote a mock epistle... it was very good.

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« Reply #16 on: March 18, 2010, 10:53:08 AM »
Number 1

You could easily spend countless pages just writing about the various abilities of each color mask. Even though it would be boring it would fill up a novel in no time.

Then again I like sci-fi/ fantasy novels. And of course with that one you could just describe their world. Where as with the other one there is not much to describe unless you want to copy your psychology book.

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« Reply #17 on: March 18, 2010, 11:03:41 AM »
Please DON'T be boring!  :D

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« Reply #18 on: March 18, 2010, 11:23:20 AM »
Number 1

You could easily spend countless pages just writing about the various abilities of each color mask. Even though it would be boring it would fill up a novel in no time.

Then again I like sci-fi/ fantasy novels. And of course with that one you could just describe their world. Where as with the other one there is not much to describe unless you want to copy your psychology book.

Why on earth would someone want to INTENTIONALLY write a boring book?  :-\ :D :D :D
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« Reply #19 on: March 18, 2010, 11:26:23 AM »
Why on earth would someone want to INTENTIONALLY write a boring book?  :-\ :D :D :D

LOL!!! idk some people do it though
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