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Style => Jazz => Topic started by: budda963 on December 27, 2007, 07:33:02 PM

Title: Criticism Wanted!!! Dont be kind!!!
Post by: budda963 on December 27, 2007, 07:33:02 PM

Hey guys... I already posted this in the piano room but...I'm lookin for some people to tear my playing apart so i can get better. Check out this vid http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sdZayrs42lw (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=sdZayrs42lw) Dont spare my feelings.  Im really not a singer at ALL.  Im just singing to get the song across
What should I work on to get better? What do you like? What Dont you like?

Title: Re: Criticism Wanted!!! Dont be kind!!!
Post by: Rjthakid on December 28, 2007, 12:41:18 PM

My suggestion would be to follow the original melody line of the song a little closer.

There were parts of the song where the melody was so far from the original I couldn't quite distinguish it.

I LOVE using dissonant/funky chords too.  You just have to pick your spots.

You sound good bro.  Keep doing what you're doing man. 

Title: Re: Criticism Wanted!!! Dont be kind!!!
Post by: thelearner2 on December 28, 2007, 12:45:57 PM

you sound great man you just have to make sure that the listener are know thesong without you singing

Title: Re: Criticism Wanted!!! Dont be kind!!!
Post by: Wolfram on January 02, 2008, 02:36:16 AM

It was a nice tune...  I am not sure if you wanted the keyboard part to stand on its own though.  I basically hear it as block chords accompanying your voice.  Are you playing your chords all in one position? (open, closed) or are you alternating back and forth throughout?  I could not really tell but I got the impression that you were playing octaves or octaves and fifths in the left and then a wide open voicing (1-3-5-7-9 or 3-5-7-9-11) in the right.  Jazz harmony is different than gospel harmony.  I would like to hear the melody more in the actual keyboard part OR I would like to hear more movement (not necessarily chordal), in the keys.  Jazz is about harmonization and reharmonization.  I would be interested in hearing another take of this without you singing, but with a clear melody in the right hand and a good left hand accompaniment coming from the left.  It will be a different sort of 'left brain, right brain' thinking for you...

Good luck!

Title: Re: Criticism Wanted!!! Dont be kind!!!
Post by: musallio on January 02, 2008, 02:09:39 PM

Quote from: thelearner2 on December 28, 2007, 12:45:57 PM

you sound great man you just have to make sure that the listener are know thesong without you singing

Hi..

Welcome to the block..

I look 4ward to shedding with U here.

Title: Re: Criticism Wanted!!! Dont be kind!!!
Post by: PianoWizard on January 03, 2008, 04:41:11 PM

Welcome to the LGM family "thelearner2".....Be Blessed.

PianoWiz...